Does the sentence make sense? If not how can I word it to make sense?

The broccoli like trees stand tall in the distance, while holding their shape; as the soft cotton candy clouds float blissfully through the rich blue sky.

Does the sentence make sense? If not how can I word it to make sense?
The trees stand tall in the distance, their shape reminiscent of uncooked broccoli, holding their shape as soft clouds float blissfully through the rich, blue sky like delicate wisps of cotton candy.





Honestly, I think there%26#039;s got to be a better way to describe the trees than *broccoli*, but if that is the comparison you want to use... that%26#039;s your prerogative.
Reply:put a comma after broccoli and after trees but not after distance and take out the semi colon after shape.





That%26#039;s how I would write it I think.
Reply:You don%26#039;t need that semicolon there for one thing. You also need a hyphen between broccoli and like, because otherwise it sounds like you%26#039;re talking about broccoli that%26#039;s like trees, instead of trees that are like broccoli.
Reply:The broccoli, like trees, stand tall in the distance as the soft cotton candy clouds float blissfully through the rich blue sky.
Reply:The broccoli stands like a tall tree in the distance, whilst still holding its shape; as the soft cotton candy clouds float blissfully through the rich blue sky.
Reply:The broccoli stands tall like trees in the distance, holding their shape as soft cotton candy clouds float blissfully through the rich blue sky.
Reply:No. The sentence does not make sense and it seems that very many people have never learned how to write a grammatically correct sentence.





Are you describing broccoli or broccoli-like trees?





%26quot;holding their shape %26quot;is meaningless verbiage.





The semicolon usage is incorrect.





The use of adjectives and metaphors in the second part of the sentence are good if you are writing bad poetry.





The broccoli-like trees stand tall in the distance against a rich blue sky across. Cottony clouds float.
Reply:It%26#039;s pretty sensible, just need to fix the commas:





%26quot;The broccoli-like trees stand tall in the distance while holding their shape, as the soft, cotton candy clouds float blissfully through the rich blue sky.%26quot;





Or %26quot;rich, blue sky%26quot; depending on if you mean the sky is both rich and blue, or the sky is a rich blue.





Edit: Ohhh, the trees are like broccoli and not the other way around. Heehee.



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